Monday, 19 July 2010

My Immortal Chapter Two - LOLWUT?

I seem to enjoy having my brain raped.

Chapter 2.

AN: Fangz 2 bloodytearz666 4 helpin me wif da chapta! BTW preps stop flaming ma story ok!

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ENOUGH WITH THE 666 ALREADY!

The next day I woke up in my bedroom. It was snowing and raining again. I opened the door of my coffin and drank some blood from a bottle I had. My coffin was black ebony and inside it was hot pink velvet with black lace on the ends. I got out of my coffin and took of my giant MCR t-shirt which I used for pajamas. Instead, I put on a black leather dress, a pentagram necklace, combat boots and black fishnets on. I put on four pairs of earrings in my pierced ears, and put my hair in a kind of messy bun.

My friend, Willow (AN: Raven dis is u!) woke up then and grinned at me. She flipped her long waist-length raven black hair with pink streaks and opened her forest-green eyes. She put on her Marilyn Manson t-shirt with a black mini, fishnets and pointy high-heeled boots. We put on our makeup (black lipstick white foundation and black eyeliner.)


Okay, okay. First of all (+1 Costume Porn). Also (+1 Continuity Fail). Willow woke up and grinned at Ebony, and then opened her eyes. LOLWUT? Also another (+1 Costume Porn)


“OMFG, I saw you talking to Draco Malfoy yesterday!” she said excitedly.

“Yeah? So?” I said, blushing.

“Do you like Draco?” she asked as we went out of the Slytherin common room and into the Great Hall.

“No I so fucking don’t!” I shouted.

“Yeah right!” she exclaimed. Just then, Draco walked up to me.

“Hi.” he said.

“Hi.” I replied flirtily.

“Guess what.” he said.

“What?” I asked.

“Well, Good Charlotte are having a concert in Hogsmeade.” he told me.

“Oh. My. Fucking. God!” I screamed. I love GC. They are my favorite band, besides MCR.

“Well…. do you want to go with me?” he asked.

I gasped.


(+2 DNDTR) 2 points for this. One for the concert in Hogsmeade and another for this: Draco is a pure blood wizard. He would not bother messing around with muggle bands, WHICH DON'T EXSIST AT THE TIME OF THE POTTER VERSE. So another (+1 DNDTR)

I can sense that I will go insane soon.

Final Tally (including Chapter 1
Final Tally
- Costume Porn: 2
- Self Insert: 1
- Mary Sue: 1
- Dictionary/Thesarus Rape: 0
- Bitch: 0
- ROFL: 0
- Wait? What? Whoa...: 0
- Continuity Fail: 1
- Purple Prose: 2
- Did Not Do The Research: 5
- Department Of Redundancy Department: 0

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